I am from the organized mess I call my room.
the place i call my sanctuary.
I am from the memories my friends, family, and i have.
the memories that make me who i am today.
I am from the laughs and giggles of first grade gossip.
I am from the bunk beds my brother and i shared when were little.
when we were best friends
I am from the notes the "tooth fairy" and i would e3xchange on numerous occasions
I am from the loud music that flows out of my headphones.
music that sparks my creativity and inspires me.
I am from the smell of spearmint gum that fills almost every high school classroom.
when i walk through the crowded halls, i begin to miss being a little kid, having no worries.
i am from growing up , but still believing i can go back to kindergarten
I love the first sentence about your room, how it is an organized mess(mine is too). My favorite part is the section about the bunk beds and how you and your brother used to be best friends, it reminded me of my brother and all the forts we used to make using blankets and pillows.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how your piece centered on your childhood. It makes me miss my kindergarten days and the innocent fun I had when I was younger. Great poem!
ReplyDeleteI love how personal this poem feels. I really get the sense of who you are and what you believe in. I love the line about the tooth fairy :)
ReplyDeleteI am completely loving how this poem can relate not only to you, but everyone around you. I found myself pondering if I was from some of the same stuff you are. Your poem provoked some powerful thoughts and applaud you for that. My favorite line is "i am from growing up, but still believing i can go back to kindergarten." One thing I would change however is how you would end the poem. I would have rather liked an ending to tie everything togather, but I was left wanting more. Still Maddy you did a wonderful job, and I think you are an amazing poet and should give yourself more credit!
ReplyDeleteI really like the last line in your poem and a lot of other lines like, "I am from the smell of spearmint gum that fills almost every high school classroom". You have great rhyming and alliteration. I like how you focused this piece on your child hood and then how now that you've grown up, you miss it but you still believe that you can be that little kid again. Great poem! :)
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